“No, no this can’t be happening.” Trying to breathe. I ran and ran to the point were my side cramped so bad that I collapsed. I was so close and that’s when I heard the noise that still makes me cringe to this day. An ambulance. As I stood up to attempt to run some more as I get to the corner of my street there went the ambulance. I was too late. He was already gone.
It was a quiet Sunday at the house. It was the end of February and it was still really chilly out side, so most the kids in are house had colds. I remember most of us kids were sitting on the floor in front of the T.V watching some cartoons. My Brother Zachary had a cold and runny nose. My dad called him upstairs to get some medicine “Zachary get up here and get some medicine before I lay down to take a nap.” “No dad” he said. He didn’t want to take the medicine but my dad insisted. He said “If you want to get better than you have to take this.” Finally he took the cough medicine.
I left to my girl friends house to go hangout. I wasn’t suppose to but I was a rebel. I did what I wanted when I wanted. It was towards the evening when my sister called my friends house. “Carly, you need to come home.” I asked “Why?” The next couple words were a blur. “Zachary stop breathing.” I didn’t even hang up the phone, I just ran out the door before anyone could offer to give me a ride or ask me what was the matter. I just ran and ran like I would never stop. And then I had stumbled to the ground from the pain in my side. I was so close. Just around the corner and I would be there. But the noise that rang in my ears told me I was too late. All I could think of is that I should have been there. I could have saved him. After the ambulance passed by I ran the rest of the way home. My neighbors were inside my house. It was all so confusing. I just wanted to find my parents.
Hours had passed by and we were all waiting downstairs on the couch and my parents walked through the door. My mom looked like sh*t. All I remember was apologizing for leaving the house without asking. We all sat on the couch and my my dad said was “he didn’t make it.”
11 comments:
I like how you use your emotion and tell how you feel in a deep meaning. I also like how you can express yourself freely without care. I believe that if something like that happened to me I think I would try and talk to someone about it.
Im sorry for your loss. I have had many losses in my life also, its hard to cope with the death of a loved one. But you have to learn to accept the fact that they are gone, and think to yourself, "How would they want me to continue on?" I lost my older brother to a gang shooting and he wasnt in a gang, i was suppose to go get him, but got caught up with a girl, and when i got there all i saw was red and blue lights. I could have prevented the situation if I just went to get him, instead of hanging out with that girl. I know how you feel Carly and I am trully sorry. You did a good job on describing your feelings during what happened. Keep your head up, and stay strong.
Dang why didnt you ever tell me about this. Im sorry thst happened and dont ever think its your fault k hun. But you did really good on this story. It made a lot of sense and you did good on explianing your feelings an whats was happpening.
Well he sounded like a good kid. I am also sorry for your loss. That honestly is really sad. May I ask, What happend? sorry to pry but that sounds really interesting. I like how you related to yourself and opened up to the people that are reading this. I bet that it was really hard. But to let you know, it wasn't your fault. I mean imagine if you were home...what could you do that your dad or neighbor didn't? hang in their and live strong. Thanks for publishing this story, it was very well written with good grammar and punctuation.
I'm extremely sorry for what happened to your brother. It is a deep topic to choose and write about. It really sucks loosing people close to you, especially siblings. If I lost my sister I would go crazy
i am so sorry about what happened, but i know that everything happens for a reason and you did really good in your righting i know it would have to be hard to. but just head up and everything will be fine. you would just have to learn to move on cuz that's what he would want for you. The i do know is that nobody has the fault of anything just that's life every one will go through that. there was nothing you maybe would have done that's like the same with other people....
well I like how you were scared. if I was in your place I would be scared too. not only because he is my brother but because I love him. how did you deal with that? i don't think I would ever be able to deal with that crap at all.I
mean my brother is a little turd. but also because I would do anything for him. heck I would even fight a battle for him. if I had to take a bullet for him I would.
That is sad to hear specially if you were not home. But don't think it's your flat. GOD gave us all our time that we will come home to him and that was your brother's day. we will all go one day and some will go quicker than others. It hurts but life goes on.
Whoa. Carly, you are way awesome for being who you are still. I'm terribly sorry for you having to go through this. For you to come to school way happy as you are makes my day to truly see. If I lost my sister or one of my brothers I don't know what I would do. Your one of the strongest persons I know. Peace Love.
♥Elee
First of all im sorry about your brother. I really need to complement you for how strong you are. If one of my brothers we're to die, I don't know what id do. It's true that the good die young but just remember that's he's in a better place and always looking down on you. Good job if I was the teacher id give you an A+ R.I.P Zachary
Carly i'm so sorry about your loss, i didnt know you had a brother other than josh, I've never loss someone so close to me before, but i know it would be hard as hell. You a strong girl, you keep you head up, no matter what's going on in your life. I beleive that everything happens for a reason, no mattter how bad it hurts or how great that momment is.
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