You yell and can’t seem to stop
STOP IT!
You keep sipping on that whiskey bottle full of your addiction
STOP IT!
Your making me hate you more and more everyday
STOP IT
You complain to my little sister for getting touched by her brother just
Because you are drunk
STOP IT
You ruin everything you touch. And everything
That I walk past
STOP IT
You complain that our family just isn’t good enough
STOP IT
We can’t move anywhere in our relationship like a father and daughter
Should because you’re powerless
Your powerless over your addiction your killing yourself slowly dad
STOP IT
My fingers want to grab that bottle and smash it cause
Then I could...
STOP IT
You taught me to never leave someone you love behind
But I seem to be getting farther and farther away from you
MAKE IT STOP.
I want you to live a healthy life and not kill yourself with something that you can not control so if you don’t
STOP IT
I WILL!!!!
16 comments:
This is strong, powerful, and full of meaning. I love how I can feel the emotion. Has your dad read this, if not, I think you should have him read this. Its amazing. Great Job!
♥Elee
I thing you really did a great job on this. I think you could put the STOP IT in better places but its still good. You could kind of not reveal some information. I think you really expressed some feelings in this and that's a good thing.
Damn. I hope you get him to stop. I like how you put "STOP IT" in the end of you're lines. Keep you're head up though and don't stress.
I like this poem, its cool that you can write about stuff like this, like about your life and stuff its really cool. Great job keep up the work~!
Wow, great story based line in it and choice of words. I like how you make it so real.
Sirena
Wow words can't explain. this peom is so powerful. And moving, It shows so much emotion! How you feel and what you want. I can tell you don't want to loose this person. keep trying and do whatever it takes and you'll succeed.
Wooooow. I Like it. You used a great choice of words and it has a strong meaning behind all of it. Good job. :)
It's good. Real good. I mean I can feel the emotion(s) behind your writing. I also love how the words flow together.It reminds me of when my mom's boyfriends would beat on me. Nice job.
I think this has a lot of meaning in it. The poem it self stands out good job.
Thats pretty deep i dont know who your talking about but to me you gotta do whats best for the relationship.
Sirena, wow! You know how to put power into your words and make the reader feel those emotions you're trying to express. I hope one day he comes to reality for you, himself, and your family.
WOW......that is super powerful. I don't know where to begin. i love that your so powerful about what your feeling. I support you 100% i don't think that's right and i think that your doing good keep your head up!!!!!:)
Lesli I don't know you too well but i always see you around school.
I really like your poem cause i can relate to it in a way.
My mom choose drugs over me and my sister and we tried so hard to get her to stop. I pray every day for my mom to get better i hope things work out for you and your father in the future.
i can understand how this may feel but the fact of the matter is that mabey this poem has a deeper meaning
I think you did really well.I like it very much especially when you said STOP IT!
I like how you can express yourself well without fear. You let people know what is going on.
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